So ... back in 2006 there was this
http://www.irishgaelictranslator.com/tr ... 50723.html

... and I was wanting to adjust the meter a bit to make it a smidge closer to the English. Does this work well enough or does the addition of the few extra words banjax it.

Sa lá is gile, san oíche is duibh
Ní ealóidh olc, mo amharc fein
Lig na ndaoine a adhradh, an neart dé oilc
Fainic mo cumhacht... Laindéarléas Glas

i mBéarla


If somebody was feeling particularly helpful, an explanation of comparatives would be useful. I'm dodgy on how to convert the -est suffix from English to Irish (Bright-est, Black-est).

You might find this useful: http://nualeargais.ie/gnag/adjekt2.htm

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Go raibh maith agat! Now to slowly digest what I just read.

Happy chewing!

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Perhaps:

Sa lá is gile, san oíche is duibhe
Ní ealóidh olc as m'amharc féin
Na daoine a adhraíonn neart an oilc,
Bídís ar a bhfaichill ar mo chumhacht ... solas an Laindéir Ghlais

Await further input (and re-correction) ...

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Múinteoir Gaeilge - Irish Teacher
My "specialty" is Connemara Irish, particularly Cois Fhairrge dialect, but I can also speak Ulster and Munster Irish with native-level pronunciation.
Is fearr Gaeilge ḃriste ná Béarla cliste, cinnte, aċ i ḃfad níos fearr aríst í Gaeilge ḃinn ḃeo na nGaeltaċtaí.
Gaeilge Chonnacht (GC), go háraid Gaeilge Chois Fhairrge (GCF), Gaeilic Uladh (GU), Gaelainn na Mumhan (GM), agus Gaeilge an Chaighdeáin Oifigiúil (CO).

My attempt, in Munster Irish, using a few alternate spellings to
complete the rhyme and going for older grammar for effect.

Sa ló is gile, san oíche is duibhe,
Ní teithfidh aon olc óm' shúilíbh,
I dtaobh an té a adhrann neart an áirseóra,
Bíodh eagla air roim mo chomhacht, solas an lóchrainn uaine!

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The dialect I use is Cork Irish.
Ar sgáth a chéile a mhairid na daoine, lag agus láidir, uasal is íseal

Go raibh míle maith agaibh! Tá iad thar cionn ar fad!!!

(Ara, is fearr liomsa "lóchrann" ... smaoiním)

Yeah, Lóchrann Uaithne definitely sounds better!

And by the way, using ló was a very nice touch.
That, and the dative plural, added gravitas and a poetic quality to the solemn oath – Well done Breandán and Lon Dubh!

Just for fun I made a recording:

Beware my power

Hope it isn't too bad!

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The dialect I use is Cork Irish.
Ar sgáth a chéile a mhairid na daoine, lag agus láidir, uasal is íseal

Well it sounds brilliant to me!
You'd obviously have a bright future in the Green Lantern Corps if you should ever decide to join.

Just letting you know: I was taught to pronounce uaithne with a "h" sound like "OOin-hi". This is probably just a slight dialect difference, but I thought that I should mention it anyway.